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I am Fizzius Boardius Maximus (the very, very famous gladiator of Ancient Rome) with my companion and gladitorial assistant Bertius Tiberius Sparticus Salamandius Bestius E-Petius in the Worldius... ran out of spacius.

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The 'Roman Mysteries' author, Caroline Lawrence has written a story just for you lot and she wants you to finish it off or write your own!

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WRITE YOUR STORY HERE: www.bbc.co.uk/dna/mb...

GOOD LUCK!

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Message 2 - posted by Caroline_Lawrence (U12528225) , Jun 30, 2008

Hi everyone

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Here's part one of the story I have written for the message boards. I hope you enjoy finishing it or writing your own!

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'I could hear a flute as the door of the Roman townhouse swung open, and I saw a large bright atrium with a rainwater pool at its centre. Four plaster columns - painted deep red to about eye level - stood at each corner of the pool, supporting the roof around the skylight. Out on the street it had been hot as Hades, but in here the air was deliciously cool and smelt faintly incense.
The incense probably originated from the small shrine in the far right hand corner of the room. The soft notes of the flute came from an African girl. She sat at a table with three other children, and as she played, she rested her bare feet on the broad back of a sleeping black dog...'
FINISH THE STORY HERE: www.bbc.co.uk/dna/mb...

Caroline Lawrence

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Message 3 - posted by Caroline_Lawrence (U12528225) , Jul 2, 2008

Hi story-writers!

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Here's the second part of the story:
'Beside the dark-skinned flautist, an intelligent-looking girl with light brown hair was reading a papyrus scroll and making notes on a wax-tablet. She absently sucked a strand of light brown hair that had come unpinned.
Opposite the African girl, a curly-haired boy was putting the finishing touches to a small wooden model of a siege tower. He was wheezing slightly and stopped every so often to breathe from a herb pouch around his neck...'
Part three will be up very soon but carry on the story yourself here: www.bbc.co.uk/dna/mb...

Caroline Lawrence

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Message 4 - posted by Fizzie (U8617058) -Helper , Jul 2, 2008

Hey everyone!

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Have a go at finishing the story here -
www.bbc.co.uk/dna/mb...

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Message 5 - posted by Caroline_Lawrence (U12528225) , Jul 3, 2008

Hello everyone!

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Here's the third and final part of my story -
'The youngest of the four was a boy of about ten, wearing a sea-green tunic. He was using a small folding knife to carve something into the table. As I moved closer I could see what he was writing: LUPUS WAS HERE.'
Please have a go at finishing it or writing your own here:

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www.bbc.co.uk/dna/mb...

GOOD LUCK!
Caroline Lawrence

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Message 6 - posted by Fizzie (U8617058) -Helper , Jul 8, 2008

Get posting everyone!

Follow the link...

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Message 8 - posted by U12608416 (U12608416) , Jul 8, 2008

The dull blast of a horn signalled the end of the fourth watch.The smouldaring embers of a thousand campfires,fanned by the cool morning breeze,glowed in the half-light.The night sentries relaxed at their postswaiting to be relieved.Soon soldiers emerged from their tents yawning and shivering as they kicked over the embers and added wood to cook their fires.

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Message 10 - posted by princessgroveychick (U12610715) , Jul 8, 2008

once a time a egeption mummy had came to live the agents had one night to take the golden brick outofaaagentmummywoolandbringthemummybacktolive.jordan8

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Message 11 - posted by famousbabyblue (U12615604) , Jul 9, 2008

hi my name islucy thks 4 the message and i will be respectful and polite

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Message 12 - posted by U12608416 (U12608416) , Jul 9, 2008

One peticular soldier was Mucius Caius Callus. He had slick black hair with a centourion`s he u
niform."hurry!"he shouted on top of a food wagon"we need to defend and run a great empire!"
hope you enjoy the next part of my carried on story!

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Message 13 - posted by U12616171 (U12616171) , Jul 9, 2008

very good sounds fantastic from the beginning. i could never write a story like that ,well done!

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Message 18 - posted by clevergigglegirls (U12618104) , Jul 9, 2008

can i write a differant story,like the story
of tracy beaker PLEASE
GOOD LUCK AND How do i use the smilli faces

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Message 19 - posted by U12559022 (U12559022) , Jul 9, 2008

I woke several times that night, each of the opportunities trying to escape and run as far away as possible. But whenever I tried to walk around an invisible force pushed me back against my will. The last time I awakened and tried to break free of this nightmare, I saw the dark-skinned girl. Her wooden necklace glinted in the moonlight coming through the windows. Something seemed a little odd. We were sleeping on the floor. Comfortable on the mats. That was pretty normal. Jonathan, the curly-haired boy, and Flavia snoring in their dreams. That was pretty normal too. But then I saw Nubia, the dark-skinned girl. Her necklace was rather odd. Was it because she was wearing it at night? No; I was wearing my locket too.
Ah. It was because the wood was glowing. What-this didn�t make sense. I sat up trying to put together pieces of my mind to let me understand why her necklace was that way. THUD! I fell back against my mat with a bang, cutting my head in the sudden movement.
�That wretched spell again.� My mind clicked and I abruptly knew why I couldn�t sit up or walk on my own two feet. That mysterious man. He had offered me a funny-looking drink and I had greedily taken it, as my need for liquid to run down my throat was too immense for me to refuse. I gulped it down swiftly and waited for the man to offer more. But instead of putting forward the suggestion of supplementary fluid, he turned and left me on my own in the dark room. Later I had departed from the room and joined the other children downstairs. There must have been something in the drink, I told myself. I rolled off my mat along the polished marble floor and over to where Nubia lay. I unclipped her necklace gently and rolled back over to my mat. I studied it hard and took in every detail of the African carvings. On one piece of wood, it read, AURORA. I wondered why and then I saw a spectacular and unreal sight. Nubia�s face was in the sky.
I shut my eyes and rubbed hard. I looked again at the sky and still the face was there.
It was a while after, while I was thinking all of this through, that the same sharp pain that had invaded my mind earlier was attacking it yet again. I heard the man�s voice inside my head.
Child, you have seen what you ought not to have seen. It has left you puzzled, confused. It has not let you retire from alert consciousness to half consciousness. Please let me draw the memory from your mind-
NO! I screamed at him. Although I didn�t know it I had not only shouted in my mind, but out loud to the silent townhouse too.
Flavia, Jonathan and Lupus, the boy that was the youngest of the four, woke at the sound of my troubled voice. Only Nubia slept on into the coming
YOUNG ONE, YOU DO NOT KNOW WHAT YOU ARE MEDDELING WITH! THAT WAS NOT FOR YOU TO SEE.
Then why did I see it?
Because I didn�t give you the right amount of the sleeping liquor.
Then that�s your problem.
Yes, it is. But all the same, that-vision was not a thing you were meant to have observed.
Stay OUT! I pushed him out of my mind and, for hours, stayed with the metres high stone wall.
I soon became weak and the stone wall fell into a heap of rubble on the floor of my head. The man entered and I could not stop him from trying to take the memory of Nubia�s face in the clouds away from me. But it seemed he was content, for the time being, of putting it to the back of my thoughts so that I would not access it for a long time. And so life went on, as it had only a few days ago. Sleep, wake, eat, play, learn, eat, learn, play, eat, play, snack, sleep and so on.
We learnt things I did not use to learn. About geography and basic arithmetic, famous emperors of Rome etcetera. Then we learned about potions, anti-dotes and cures. It was all very...unusually targeted. But it was the lesson about the Aurora that I remembered most. It was while I was getting private tutorials.
�Aurora is the roman word for sunrise, dawn, whatever you want to call it, and one of the girls in the world that are called Aurora rules the time and speed the sunrise raises.�
Click! again. AURORA was engraved in Nubia�s wooden necklace. Her face was in the sky. Her name was Aurora and she was the chosen Sunriser.
�My memory!� I say, quiet enough for the man, whose name I found out was Dr Mordicai, to hear only a mumble.
�Sorry?�
�My-nothing.�
�What is it young one?�
�N-nothing.�
He invaded my mind again. I had grown used to this and it didn�t hurt anymore. I put up the defensive wall and felt confident as I could hold it for more than an hour. He stopped attacking my mind.
�Who chooses the Sunriser?� I asked.
�The Sky God. Whoever he picks will appear in the sky, and something valuable to them will glow.�
The necklace.
So Nubia, or Aurora, was the Sunriser. And, as I was about to find out, the necklace was the tool she used to control it...
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